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12 ears per stalk
I can hear them listening
between the roots and the soil
I plant my feet
wriggling toes
wet earth


Midnight rises again
the tides control the moon
repetitious ebb and flow
stars wink off the seconds
distant suns
vast nothing


Never is abstract ideas
the present future passed
only before you and me
and the musical affirmative
clear melodies
discordant pause


Red and golden blends
of abstract ideas
of winking stars
of eavesdropping corn
two deviants
warm embrace

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A love poem. :)

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September 30, 2007
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:iconinfinitecreature:
Awww... that's lovely Max! I like how you've set the stanzas apart. It could almost be two poems at once. :D
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:iconcontrarymary:
*contrarymary Oct 3, 2007  Hobbyist General Artist
That's great...a simple approach that expresses some profound stuff. My only criticism, and a very tiny one, is that you could maybe find a better word than 'repetitious'...I mean, that's what ebb and flow is, so maybe a word that says more about how the ebb and flow is for you...But a lovely piece anyway! :clap: :hug:
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:iconphoenix75:
Lovely, Max. :hug: :heart:
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:iconstarbucksdream:
*Puffs on a corn husk pipe*
:heart:
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:iconcar-shrimp-kid:
YEhee! Thats so aldorable :3
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:iconsoftcell72:
:aww: it''s so sweet, nice hint of mystery, privacy(except for the corn of course-but even if they told no'one would understand them) and timelessness
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~Hai-zaka Oct 1, 2007  Hobbyist General Artist
OOOH!

That's so cuuuute! :aww:

Who is the lucky deviant?

Anyways, good vocabulary and imagery, I liked it!

Nice going Max.
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:iconnataliekelsey:
Mood: Love `NatalieKelsey Oct 1, 2007  Hobbyist General Artist
:aww: Sweet and visually bright. love it!
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